On an early Sunday morning, three students from Alpha Beta Zeta fraternity were admitted to the hospital due to alcohol poisoning.
The three students are Press Martin, from Shetar, New Hampshire; Al Amalek, from Nashville, TN; Rob Smith, from here in town. Martin and Smith were released Monday morning while Amalek is still there and listed in critical condition.
A statement from the university: “Our initial investigation indicates that these young men were at a party at the ABZ house. A number of witnesses say alcohol was being consumed. Based on that, we are suspending the fraternity and its activities on campus. We have yet to decide how long the suspension will last.”
The University president, Harvey Smithville, restated the policy banning alcohol from fraternity houses located on campus property. Any fraternity will be suspended and a second offense will result in a ban that lasts five years. The university will also consider increasing its police patrols of fraternity houses on weekends.
Interfraternity Council president Bart Addison agrees that alcohol has no place at fraternity parties. However, he believes that the whole fraternity should not be punished for the actions of a few members. He will ask President Smithville to reconsider his suspension of the ABZs.
March 3, 2010 @ 10:42 am
Your lead is pretty good. “An” is unnecessary, and I bet you could also pack in info about the suspension.
Your second graf is very wordy and takes a long time to deliver the news. Use active verbs, not “are.”
Freshman Al Amalek remains in critical condition, while junior Press Martin and sophomore Rob Smith were released Monday morning.